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Joining As Totepo; joining
Topic Started: Dec 4 2007, 11:28 PM (323 Views)
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Character you wish to be:Totepo
Planet you want to start on:earth
(For Saiyans) Fighting Style you wish to have:agressive
(For Aliens) Stat you wish increased by +5:
How did you find this site:Google.com

What makes you want to join and how long do you plan on staying:i loved dbz ever since i saw it on tv. Ever since i have been looking for a good rpg based on dbz and i think i have found one =>.i will stay forever

AIM Screen Name (required): Totepoultimate
Email (required): hoopers51@msn.com
Name registered on forums (required): totepo159

story of totepo wich i made up

When Totepo was young he was born with a low power lv, result Totepo was ignored by his parent and got in a lot of fights. every day he had to prove that he was something to be reckoned with.

Totepo was an only child son of an elite warrior who killed thousand of men at the grasp of his fingers. Totepos father beat him daily with his strong hand. Totepo never knew why his father always beat him unlit he had felt the thrill of his first kill.

One day at training school, Totepo was talking to a close friend that told him "their was a rumor that is going around training school, that you don't have a pl." When Tetepo heard this he felt the thrill of anger come over him,as he kicks the closes kid. Totepo beats up everyone in his training school and kills the one who started the rumor, never again was the power of Totepo mentioned again.

After this event Totepo father actually started talking to Totepo. Totepo learned the gruesome tells of his fathers haunting past. He learned his father was a destroyer of planets, and he enslaved hundred of races. His father explained it was Totepos time to rise and claim a planet for the race of Sayians.

Totepo never saw his father after that day where he explained so much. Although Totepo didn't want to follow in his father's footsteps. That day Totepo got sent to a far off planet to conqure, but a asteroid hit his ship directing it to earth. When he landed he started to gather resources so he could set up camp that night.

Totepo made a fire and cooked a large fish he caught with his bare hands. Totepo slept with a bear that night in a cave close to his landing site. Totepo trained for almost year with that bear wrestling it everyday, growing stronger and faster.

Totepo moved on after that year in search of a life with meaning. Later that year Totepo came across a martial artist tournament. This caught his interest and he noticed that the people were fighting as if they were from him planet.

Totepo tried to join the tournament but the people who were admitting competition said that he was not strong enough. Ever since Totepo has wanted to become the greatest warrior so he can fight everyone.

This is what totepo like to say and do.
"I'm Totepo fear me" said the mighty warrior as he smashes your face in.
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Totepo loves to eat some time he thinks that his fight is relly with his hunger. the hunger of violence in his life.


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Cool pics. How can i get some pic like that but of my charecter?
I was woundering how long it usually take to join the rpg?
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Zarbon will post here either denying you or accepting you. If he accepts you, he will tell you to IM him.
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so what do i im him?
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I think you should read a book or something. Your spelling and grammar has a lot to be desired. Also I do believe John, a not even accepted member told you that: If he accepts you he will IM you. He hasn't accepted you therefore you don't IM him yet.

I think you should reform your post.
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so you read my story, sweet.
thanks for the info.
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The intial story of Tottepo's past is interesting enough, but you need to use Commas more, like this:

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Totepo trained for a year with that bear wrestling it everyday growing stronger and faster.


Would look better like this:

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Totepo trained for a year with that bear wrestling it everyday, growing stronger and faster.


And also remember that when you are saying something like Tottepo father, be sure to put a 's at the end. Like it should be Tottepo's father instead of Tottepo father.

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Totepo after talking to a close friend when his friend mentioned that a rumor had been going around training school that Totepo had never really had any power
when Tetepo heard this he felt a thrill of anger come over him.


This entire sentence has alot of errors and is hard to understand. I would put it like this.

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After talking to a close friend at a training school, he had learned that there was a rumour going around that he was weak and had no power. After hearing this Tottepo felt a thrill of anger go through his body and he went on beating up everyone in that school and killing the one starting the rumour.


That would be so much easier to understand.

Also the ending really wasn't an RP ending, it was strange and unneeded.

But I would definetely read some other people's RPs and can give you links to some very good ones.
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I wouldn't suggest learning off my RPs. I would consider myself a good RPer but I do not have perfect grammar.

Look at: Zorn's, Mariakoh's, Krillin's or Raditz's.
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Thank you for helping me become a better writer. I will check myself before I wreck myself.
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Totepo159,Dec 10 2007
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Thank you for helping me become a better writer. I will check myself before I wreck myself.
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If its hard to check it by yourself just use word, and if u dont it will be a pain to fix it xD
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Thanks to Cooler for this
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