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| Topic Started: Nov 29 2007, 12:24 AM (443 Views) | |
| disgraced hbk | Nov 29 2007, 12:24 AM Post #1 |
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The Living Hell
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Character you wish to be:Burter Planet you want to start on:Namek (For Saiyans) Fighting Style you wish to have: (For Aliens) Stat you wish increased by +5:speed How did you find this site: I Googled DBZ RPG's What makes you want to join and how long do you plan on staying:I loved dbz as a kid and I will stay until I'm banned AIM Screen Name (required):Droodles505 Email (required):HBK0860@aol.com Name registered on forums (required):Burter Please include a small example of a roleplay that you might have done in the past. Must be above 300 words. (Required) In the midst of summer, a wandering alien, known as Burter traveled the galaxy robbing helpless creatures in the universe. One day, Burter came across a planet known as Namek. "What a pathetic little planet. I shouldn't even waste my time on such a puny ball of worthless creatures." But, he decided to go on to the little planet. While exploring the planet, Burter came across another alien. This alien was short, red, and had white, long hair. "State your business wanderer, you don't want trouble with me!"Said the little red alien. Amused by the little red aliens threat, Burter shouted out " Listen you little punk, give me your money and I wont have to kill you!" The red alien laughed at Burter's threat and said, "You have no idea who you're messing with. I'm Jeice, a member of the Ginyu Force, an elite force made up of 4 of the Galaxy's greatest warriors. I wouldnt dream of losing to a weak little thief like you" Burter felt enraged at Jeice's comment, and in an instant of fury Burter rushed towards Jeice and shouted, "Well then let's see if the Ginyu Force is good enough for the fastest alien in the Galaxy!" Amazed by Burter's speed, Jeice became hesitant in attacking. Burter had unleashed hundreds of punches and kicks towards Jeice within seconds. Jeice was defeated with the least amount of effort. What an annoying pest, thought Burter. As Burter walked up to Jeice, who was lying on the ground in agony. Burter looked down at Jeice with pity, and said, "Pathetic piece of trash, you are not even worth killing." As Burter left to rob some other planet, Jeice shouted out, "Wait! How would you like to join the Ginyu Force and serve under the tyrant Freiza?" Jeice caught Burter's attention. "F-Freiza? I would be honored to serve under the tyrancy of Freiza." "Good. But you have to talk it over with our leader, Ginyu." So, Burter and Jeice rushed over towards the Ginyu force Spaceship. When they arrived, Burter saw a purple alien with horns sticking out of the side of his head.The purple alien glanced at Burter, and then asked Jeice, "Who's this weakling? I have no time for weaklings like this. Jeice, explain yourself!" Jeice shook in fear of his captain and said, "Th-This is B-Burter. He is very strong and fast. He has proven himself worthy in combat." "Well now it's time for the final exam. RECOOME!" In a matter of seconds, a giant fellow with orange hair appeared in front of Ginyu. He wasn't very bright, but he was very powerful.Ginyu gave the giant fellow orders, "Recoome, I want you to fight this alien. If he wins, he is a member of the Ginyu Force. But if he loses, I want you to kill him." Recoome understood and responded, "Duhh ok boss I'll make sure I win." Recoome dashed towards Burter, but he was not very quick or smart, This'll be a piece of cake. thought Burter as Recoome rushed in. In a split second, Burter disappeared in front of Recoome's face. Recoome shouted out in confusion, "Duhh where'd he go where'd he go?" Burter reappeared behind Recoome and grappled the giant.He began to spin at high speeds holding onto Recoome with all of his grip.A blue tornado began to form around Burter as he spun faster and faster. When he finally let go, Recoome was sent flying into a mountain miles away. "That was easier than I thought" said Burter. As he regained balance after the massive spin attack, Recoome came dashing over towards Burter, angrier than ever Again, Burter disappeared. This time he reappeared on a cliff about two miles away. Burter began to gather his Ki into two giant blue balls. He shot the balls at Recoome, and landed a direct hit. When the Balls collided with Recoome, Burter screamed out, "Direct hit" Burter was sure that got Recoome down for good. But Recoome was standing tall. Furious by Recoome's enormous stamina and defense, Burter rushed in with all his speed. He began throwing thousands of punches and kicks a second. Burter did not stop the massive rush until he was sure he won.When Burter stopped the punches and kicks, Recoome was on the ground. Burter had taken a relaxing breath when he knew he had won. But Recoome got back up and smashed his fists into Burter, sending him flying miles away. Now Burter was enraged to no belief. No more fooling around. Thought the angered alien. He charged an enormous amount of Ki in both hands, combined them together, and made a sword out of energy.Burter swept in and began dashing past Recoome, swiping him with the sword every time. Burter had traveled in every direction around Recoome at least FIFTY times. Recoome was finally knocked out cold. Burter had finally been victorious. Ginyu walked over to Burter and said, "Not bad. We could use someone like you under Freiza's reign. Welcome to the Ginyu Force." I hope this is better |
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| BadGoku | Nov 29 2007, 12:32 AM Post #2 |
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I'd recommend trying to make bigger paragraphs. One sentence paragraphs get's to be quite difficult to read due to all the breaks and incomplete thoughts. Try to go into detail a little more and develop your thoughts through. Why does Burter do what he does? What is he thinking? That kind of thing. |
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| disgraced hbk | Nov 29 2007, 12:39 AM Post #3 |
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Ok, I'll edit it right now thanks for the advice |
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| Oldvegeta2 | Nov 30 2007, 06:01 PM Post #4 |
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Yea, looks good now. Just wait for Alex(Zarbon to post something like "AIM me when you get a chance" once you aim him wait to be added to the roster, then, you can start playing the game. Welcome to the site in advance Andrew. |
<CENTER><![]() <select><option>Prince Vegeta</option><option>Power Level: 5,064</option><option>KI: 2,532</option><option>Strength: 716</option><option>Speed: 655</option><option>Toughness: 660</option><option>Stamina: 584</option><option>Vitality: 572</option><option>Zeni: 8,850</option></CENTER>[ | |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 2 2007, 09:35 PM Post #5 |
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sweet thanks |
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| nirvana | Dec 2 2007, 09:37 PM Post #6 |
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LOL |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 2 2007, 09:51 PM Post #7 |
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LOL. I hope that's not soon. |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 3 2007, 04:01 PM Post #8 |
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If Zarbon doesnt tell me to aim him or if I'm not pinned do I post my forum again? |
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| shen | Dec 4 2007, 02:52 AM Post #9 |
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No, that would be wasting forum space. Just IM him if he still doesn't say that you're cleared. |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 4 2007, 08:27 PM Post #10 |
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ok thanks |
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| Alex | Dec 5 2007, 10:44 AM Post #11 |
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AIM me. |
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All-time ADBZRPG battle record: 86 - 4 Winner of Best Saga Thread of 2011 (Shard of Lujati) Winner of RP of the Season Summer 2017 (The Village of Kulley) | |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 5 2007, 06:42 PM Post #12 |
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ok |
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| Alex | Dec 15 2007, 06:52 PM Post #13 |
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Will add you tomorrow. |
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All-time ADBZRPG battle record: 86 - 4 Winner of Best Saga Thread of 2011 (Shard of Lujati) Winner of RP of the Season Summer 2017 (The Village of Kulley) | |
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| disgraced hbk | Dec 16 2007, 04:22 PM Post #14 |
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now that I'm pinned what do I do? Just wait? |
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