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Join As Boku; forgot some stuff
Topic Started: Dec 8 2007, 10:07 PM (2,224 Views)
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Character you wish to be: Boku(custom human(i know its a weird name xD))



Planet i want to start at:Earth



How did u find this site: A friend that was gona play but thought it was to complicated told me.



What makes you want to join and how long do you plan on staying:Well... i love rpgs and i love dbz so a good combination . It depends on how its turns out, but i plan on staying active.



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Name registered on forums (required): Boku



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Once there was a kid called originally Brock but he once went to a martial arts tournament and saw a guy called Son Goku , he had incredible powers which surprised Brock so he decided to train and get as strong as Goku and then from then on he called himself Boku.

After years of training four years to be exact, he decided to see how strong he was to he went an fought with Goku, and as fate would have it he lost. He asked Goku were his strength was from. Then Goku revealed his secret and said that he is and alien of powerful people called Saiyan’s. So then he asked Goku if he could train with him, and Goku said ok but that it would be a training of 6 straight years. Boku got very exited, but he said he couldn’t because of school and his family. Goku then suggested that they go to the time chamber that in 1 day a year passes so in the real world he will only be gone for 6 days.

Later on they enter the time chamber, and in the first year Boku realizes he will never be as strong as Goku, so he asked Goku if he could take a blood sample of Goku so he could take it to his father that was a scientist that worked with bulmas father to see if he could get some Saiyan powers.

After Boku tells his father the whole story his father says he can but with limited powers, he would have 30 % the power of a Saiyan. Boku says that if he trains he might be at least a bit closer to Goku’s power. Then after the 5 resting years of intense training, Boku is able to go kao x10 for a short time but he doesn’t uses it because it makes his body weak, like it used to happen to Goku in the early Dragonball z saga.

Goku recommends that Boku goes on his own adventures, but first he says he should go to Planet Namek with the teleportation technique he learned, the reasons to go is to ask Guru if he has potential and if he could unlock it. After he got there he found out that some bandits were attacking so he decided he should try his abilities.

After defeating all the bandits Guru noticed he had Goku’s same battle style so he asked who he was. Boku told him he was Goku’s disciple and he wanted to see if he had potential and how he could unlock it. The Guru analyzed him and then got really surprised because of the power he had hidden. Guru told him that the only way he can release his power was looking down into his heart and ask himself why he trains so hard.

After hearing this he thanks Guru and then leaves. He then goes to planet earth and goes walking thinking why he wants to be strong. Then he remembers when he was a kid he used to be bullied by all the older kids and once his best friend came and protected him and got all hit by the bullies. He then said he was going to be stronger so he could protect all the people he could.

Later he realizes that a guy with a gun is going to kill a women because she wont give him her purse. He then goes and beats up the guy. Then he realizes that this guy is a android from red ribbon army. A lot of more androids come out(only henchmen not all the other androids). They were a lot of them, he could barely handle them so he decided to release his true power. He went super Saiyan and killed all the androids. Surprised with his power he left to tell Goku his new powers.
After Goku heard this he told him that this is yet a 25 % of his potential and that he should keep training so he finds out his full potential. He also told him that when he finds his full potential he tells Goku so they fight in the Martial arts tournament.

Goku says then that Boku is ready. Boku then goes out on his own adventures and to train and from then on they say goodbye………………………………………….


Description of Character: Alot of muscles, long hair, tall(about future trunks height) and uses special gloves of training.

If anyone has any suggestions and things i should fix plz tell me


Hope u like my char and that he gets accepted
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dude, you don't get + stats or a fighting style for being human or 1/3 sayian, even though custom humans are taken, and there are no 1/3 sayians. and you can't do a genetic sample thing, thats not gonna get accepted, like a sharingan rock lee won't get accepted in a Naruto rpg
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Lol ok ill take off the human and 1/3 sayan thing xD

But i think they might accept it cause its not that exagerated, my char can go sayan for a few secs and his strength isnt as a sayan, so idk

If it dosent get accepted ill use one of the not used characters so w/e :/
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Well you can't go Super Saiyan since that is a saiyan/half saiyan skill...which you are not.

I'm sure it's fine to have a bit of saiyan blood, but enough to go super saiyan? No. Especially since no saiya on this site is strong enough.

You also have some grammer errors on that too. I would put it in a word document and it should show the grammer errors.
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He can RP as one third Saiyan if he wants to. He can only get bonus's from being a human though. That means no Alien bonus's either. Custom Humans are full up.

Well I think they are anyways, all of them never stay except JD.

Yeah, good join form though.
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Raditz,Dec 8 2007
09:48 PM
Well you can't go Super Saiyan since that is a saiyan/half saiyan skill...which you are not.

I'm sure it's fine to have a bit of saiyan blood, but enough to go super saiyan? No. Especially since no saiya on this site is strong enough.

You also have some grammer errors on that too. I would put it in a word document and it should show the grammer errors.

Well even if he cant turn ssj it isnt as strong as the normal one also he dosent use it cause his body cant resist, if u read it says it :P

Also the errors arent that much i guess but ok ill fix it ^_^
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Vegeta Jr,Dec 8 2007
09:49 PM
He can RP as one third Saiyan if he wants to. He can only get bonus's from being a human though. That means no Alien bonus's either. Custom Humans are full up.

Well I think they are anyways, all of them never stay except JD.

Yeah, good join form though.

All true :P

Also i think there should be more than 3 custom spaces cause when this gets more popular(very soon) more and more ppl will demand custom chars , and would want something beside humans and nameks.

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Also is my storyline good? :S

I wana know if its good because it took me time to think about all that


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Raditz,Dec 8 2007
09:48 PM
Well you can't go Super Saiyan since that is a saiyan/half saiyan skill...which you are not.

I'm sure it's fine to have a bit of saiyan blood, but enough to go super saiyan? No. Especially since no saiya on this site is strong enough.

You also have some grammer errors on that too. I would put it in a word document and it should show the grammer errors.

Well even if he cant turn ssj it isnt as strong as the normal one also he dosent use it cause his body cant resist, if u read it says it :P

Also the errors arent that much i guess but ok ill fix it ^_^

I know, I read it. But at the point where he destroys all those androids seems like he uses it in life threatening situations.

Also the fact that no one can even become SSJ, and that you'll be one of the weakest won't make sense if you guy can just use it but chooses not too.

Sorry for sounding like a jerk, but your original storyline is cool. I think it would be cooler if you didn't have ties with Goku, since one day the inactive player who is Goku or some joins as him, then your character will have something to do with him even though he may not want to. Hopefully you understand what I mean.

Also in certain cases you use ( ) and have say the amount of years or the name of someone, but you should either just skip it (Because people don't need to be named or you don't need to be exact on how old he was when he was a kid) or just put a comma and then say His name was Mardek.

But pretty interesting storyline.
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Raditz,Dec 8 2007
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Boku,Dec 8 2007
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Raditz,Dec 8 2007
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Well you can't go Super Saiyan since that is a saiyan/half saiyan skill...which you are not.

I'm sure it's fine to have a bit of saiyan blood, but enough to go super saiyan? No. Especially since no saiya on this site is strong enough.

You also have some grammer errors on that too. I would put it in a word document and it should show the grammer errors.

Well even if he cant turn ssj it isnt as strong as the normal one also he dosent use it cause his body cant resist, if u read it says it :P

Also the errors arent that much i guess but ok ill fix it ^_^

I know, I read it. But at the point where he destroys all those androids seems like he uses it in life threatening situations.

Also the fact that no one can even become SSJ, and that you'll be one of the weakest won't make sense if you guy can just use it but chooses not too.

Sorry for sounding like a jerk, but your original storyline is cool. I think it would be cooler if you didn't have ties with Goku, since one day the inactive player who is Goku or some joins as him, then your character will have something to do with him even though he may not want to. Hopefully you understand what I mean.

Also in certain cases you use ( ) and have say the amount of years or the name of someone, but you should either just skip it (Because people don't need to be named or you don't need to be exact on how old he was when he was a kid) or just put a comma and then say His name was Mardek.

But pretty interesting storyline.

Actualy wen he kills the androids he dosent go ssj, his power level gets way higher.

Also i will take off the ssj thing he will use kao x10 and that way its not that of an abuse, dont u think its better.

I have to make ties with Goku because he is his inspiration and hes the reason he gets the sayajin blood, and also he is the one that tells him about the time chamber so i cant just put a time skip of 10 years and say nothing happend but anyways thx for ur help.
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Ill make him go ssj wen all the other sayajins can.
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I fixed the ssj thing and put kao x10 instead
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No. You won't go SSJ. Ever. Kaio-Ken is a learned technique in the Next Dimension, so unless you die and have eough SP to buy 10 levels you can't use that either. Another point; Goku can't just give you Saiyan blood. That's the most ridiculous thing I've ever seen on an acceptable join form.

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Mirai Trunks,Dec 9 2007
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No. You won't go SSJ. Ever. Kaio-Ken is a learned technique in the Next Dimension, so unless you die and have eough SP to buy 10 levels you can't use that either. Another point; Goku can't just give you Saiyan blood. That's the most ridiculous thing I've ever seen on an acceptable join form.

Dude...... the hell is ur problem, how did Dr. Gero create cell he got cells from the Z Warriors and cloned them, so i think its posible to put blood and get some powers so dont be an ass just because i use some imagination.
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Zomg T_T
I cant wait anymore,i wana be accepted T_T
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Imagination is good, but that's just plain ridiculous. Yes. Gero stole cells from everyone and grew them into a new being. I'll have you know that's something entirely different than walking into some guy who just happens to be a Saiyan and him going, ''Hey, you know what? I'll cut myself and let you slurp my blood out of me. Even though I did take 3rd grade Biology and know your white bloodcells will attack the invading essence in order to preserve your body's functioning, there should be no problem whatsoever in you somehow obtaining the ability to turn into a Super Saiyan regardless of my own inability to do so. Now let me slap on a band-aid and you can go kick some random guy's ass because you're allpowerful now.''

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Mirai Trunks,Dec 9 2007
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Imagination is good, but that's just plain ridiculous. Yes. Gero stole cells from everyone and grew them into a new being. I'll have you know that's something entirely different than walking into some guy who just happens to be a Saiyan and him going, ''Hey, you know what? I'll cut myself and let you slurp my blood out of me. Even though I did take 3rd grade Biology and know your white bloodcells will attack the invading essence in order to preserve your body's functioning, there should be no problem whatsoever in you somehow obtaining the ability to turn into a Super Saiyan regardless of my own inability to do so. Now let me slap on a band-aid and you can go kick some random guy's ass because you're allpowerful now.''

-_- u rly r an ass arent u

Bokus father is a scientist i think he could find a way to make the white blood cells to feel safe with the unknown cells.

I dun know wats ur fukin problem but dont be an ass just because i did some ilogical things, but if u havent noticed dbz is full of ilogical things u retarted
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What's with the insults? I'm just pointing out natural facts. No reason to call me retarded, especially with those linguistic skills.

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Uhh actually Goku has AIDS and Sickle Cell so I really don't think you want his blood.
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First off, to MT. Since this is simply an example of a roleplay, he CAN pretty much do whatever he wants with his character. He's not actually going to do those things in the RPG, the roleplay is just to see his skills as a writer, which are quite satisfactory in comparison to the more recent...weaker-minded people.

Now, to Boku. Your roleplay is ok, but there are just a few things you could tweak. First, I know you're trying to give a whole aspect of your character through the RP, but don't try to overextend and leave hardly any details in certain places. Also, as Raditz said, you do have some grammatical errors. They mainly comprise of how you sometimes forget to switch the comma with a full-stop. Otherwise, it's quite good.
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Bardock,Dec 9 2007
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Uhh actually Goku has AIDS and Sickle Cell so I really don't think you want his blood.

Lol dosent it get cured with the curu that Future Trunks gave him -_-lll
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Nah that's actually liquified viagra that Chi Chi told FT to give to Goku because he couldn't get it up.
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Dabura,Dec 9 2007
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Now, to Boku. Your roleplay is ok, but there are just a few things you could tweak. First, I know you're trying to give a whole aspect of your character through the RP, but don't try to overextend and leave hardly any details in certain places. Also, as Raditz said, you do have some grammatical errors. They mainly comprise of how you sometimes forget to switch the comma with a full-stop. Otherwise, it's quite good.


Thx and ill try to fix the grammatical errors, and ill fix the commas
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Yes, I pointed that out to him and he went apeshit and I'm to blame? Don't think so.

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Bardock,Dec 9 2007
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Nah that's actually liquified viagra that Chi Chi told FT to give to Goku because he couldn't get it up.

LOLZ!!! Funny but not true :P
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