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Yamcha; W.I.P.
Topic Started: Jan 20 2011, 10:49 PM (388 Views)
ironsoldier
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Character you wish to be:
Yamcha

Planet you want to start on:
Kanassa

Distribute 100 points between Vitality, Speed, Toughness, Stamina, and Strength:
Strength: 20
Vitality: 20
Speed: 20
Toughness: 20
Stamina: 20

Distribute 3 points between Intelligence, Charisma, and Determination:
Intelligence: 1
Charisma: 1
Determination: 1

Pick one green fundamental to start with (list here):
Bukujutsu

(Saiyans Only) Fighting Style you wish to have:

(Aliens Only) Stat you wish increased by +25:

(Changelings Only) Name and Picture of your underling:

How did you find this site:
Google

What makes you want to join and how long do you plan on staying:
A professional RPer who especially loves to RP as DBZ characters. Saw this was not only the most active site, but also the most structured. I plan on staying as long as I can.

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"What did you say?"

"You heard me. I said give me a ship right now so I can explore the universe!" Yamcha demanded Bulma. There was determination and conviction in his voice. There would be no deterring him.

"Look Yamcha, I don't know what's gotten into that little brain of yours but you need to chill out. I'm not gunna ask my father to bust his tail for you to go out into space and die!" Bulma retorted, her voice gaining volume as each word was said.

Yamcha gritted his teeth. He knew Bulma would be obstinate to his request. Normally he would back down, but he had thought it over and over, and stood behind his decision. He decided that having a shouting match with someone as feisty as the wife of Vegeta wouldn't get him anywhere.

He calmed himself down before speaking.

"Look Bulma, I now that you are looking out for me, and I appreciate that, but I need you to understand that I must do this." Yamcha said.

"Why? Why must you leave everyone who cares about you to embark on such a selfish journey?" Bulma asked, her voice now trailing off. It was obvious to Yamcha that the thought of him going out on his own hurt her. He noticed it even before she wiped some of her tears.

"Because, I am a fighter at heart. I tried to give it up, but I couldn't. It's who I am. I'm sure you're well aware of the fact that I was a thieving bandit, who happened to stumble upon you and Goku. You guys gave me and Puar a purpose. We had very little, and for that I'm grateful. I'm asking you as a long time friend to do this one request for me. Please." Yamcha said.

There was a moment of silence between the two, who sat just outside the Capsule Corp entrance. Bulma sat thinking while Yamcha stared at her, awaiting her answer. Finally, she looked at him.

"You're a moron. Fine, I guess you can go on your stupid journey. Go die if you want, see if I care." Bulma said.

A wide smile enveloped Yamcha's face. He stood up from his seat and gave Bulma the biggest hug he could possibly muster.

"Thanks Bulma, you're the best!"
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It didn't take long for the ship to be built. About a week at the most.

Yamcha was more than excited to see it, and when Dr. Briefs showed it to him, his heart stopped.

"Oh my god. It's beautiful!" Yamcha said.

"Yes she is. State of the art ship you got here. The exterior and interior design is similar to the one I built for Goku while on his way to Namek. However, I do suggest that you don't travel to deep in space. She can't traveling to far from Namek."

Yamcha nodded as Dr. Briefs said his goodbyes and left the ship to him.

After a brief moment of putting the ship in ignition, Yamcha set the coordinates to Namek, the perfect place to start his journey.

The ship hovered over the ground before taking off at full speed, causing the human to tumble across the hard flooring of the ship. He stood back up holding his head, and when he looked to the side, he saw a red headband hanging along a railing. It wasn't any ordinary headband, it was the same red headband he wore long ago, when he first met Goku and Bulma. A smile graced his lips.

"Thanks Bulma."
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I recommend you start on the planet which has a master on it.
"Death is only the beginning."

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Trust me, this will work out for me in the grand scheme of things.

See, I'll be at Kanassa, learning telepathy and telekinesis, and learning some sword techniques. Then I'll move on to another planet, maybe Kelioux, learn some stuff at the temple and buy some of the scrolls and train with Adel before moving on to Yaidrat, and then Namek.

Also I have this back story for Yamcha that'll work out great.

So trust me, I've got my bases covered with this.
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And the sample?
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Says it's a work in progress at the top. That may be what he's working on.
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Gohan
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Just so you know, u can get gem of telepathy and learn it that way
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Master,Jan 20 2011
10:12 PM
Just so you know, u can get gem of telepathy and learn it that way

Telepathy and Telekenesis are different techniques entirely from Telepathic Link.
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Right. Forgot. One is for spars and others to move things with your mind
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Which has always bothered me. Telepathy's description is closer to precognition...
It ain't over 'till ya can't think thoughts anymore.

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Everything is now in order.
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You probably note that Bulma and Vegeta are not married in our timeline, and it's usually best to ask player characters before taking control of them (although Bulma hasn't been around recently, she is still a taken character).

Having said that, your rp is pretty decent. I would recommend that you work on your dialogue. You have quite a few instances of free floating speech. Don't be afraid to use "he said" or "she said" as often as you need to. Such as-

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"Thanks Bulma, you're the best!" Yamcha said.


Also, when using dialogue commas take the place of periods (but not exclamations or question marks). I.E.-

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"Look Bulma, I now that you are looking out for me, and I appreciate that, but I need you to understand that I must do this," Yamcha said.
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05:59 PM
You probably note that Bulma and Vegeta are not married in our timeline, and it's usually best to ask player characters before taking control of them (although Bulma hasn't been around recently, she is still a taken character).

Having said that, your rp is pretty decent. I would recommend that you work on your dialogue. You have quite a few instances of free floating speech. Don't be afraid to use "he said" or "she said" as often as you need to. Such as-



Also, when using dialogue commas take the place of periods (but not exclamations or question marks). I.E.-


I thought it would be Ok since this is supposed to be a sample and all.

And thanks for the tip man. I have never been too good with dialouge.
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It's fine as a sample so long as you realize that nothing on this site is really exactly like the show.

For example: Me.
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