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Post by Join Form - Grand Dota - WIP on May 2, 2021 19:33:09 GMT -5
Were you referred?: no Discord Name: Grand Dota(now Xayl) Starting Character:Xayl Character Name: Xayl Aliases: Human Name: Tora Yami Oddman | Saiyan Name: Xayl | Demon Name: Xalmid Starting Planet: TBD Character Race:Hybrid - Saiyan/Demon Gender/b]: Female
Starting Stat Distribution: Customs = 4500 points
- Strength:1000
- Speed:800
- Toughness:800
- Stamina:1000
- Vitality:800
Starting Trait Distribution: Custom (5 points)
- Determination:2
- Charisma:2
- Intelligence:1
Starting Technique: Dodonpa (Pick 1 green technique from this page, www.alexsdbzrpg.com/techfundamental.php)
Starting Fighting Style: Aggressive (Saiyans Only. Refer to this page, alexsdbzrpg.com/styles.php)
Starting Stat Bonus:00(Aliens & Changelings Only) (Choose one stat to increase by +1500)
Character Bio: (A simple 100-300 word background of your character up to the present)
Height: 4"8"
Weight: 79lbs
Hair Colour: Black
Eye Colour: Dark Brown
Appearance: Tora is a short girl. She has dark skin and her hair color is black...
Clothing: Her current clothing is that of the common uniform of the Saiyan race...
Personality: TBD
History:
Beginnings(RP SAMPLE):
It was the strike of Frost Demons or more commonly known as The Frieza Race...
Shortly born before the dreaded invasion of the Frieza race on the Saiyan Empire. Xayl was evacuated off of planet Vegeta and like most Saiyan children, had her destination set for Earth... but sadly Xayl's pod would never make it blue peaceful planet.
Her pod all alone in space would pick up on the radar of an enemy ship, and being unable to avoid any of their attacks, they would begin firing off at her, Xayl's pod would get severely damaged.
No one would hear her infant tears as her pod would be sent ricocheting off into deep space.
Unable to do anything but cry, she continued to do so... yet who knew, that by just doing just that, would help her, even if it was a little.
In time her constant rage and fear would cause her immense Ki to poor out in bowls, offsetting her ship in a more stable direction, yet this direction would set her no where near the peaceful planet in which her parents had wished for her to go to... instead she had found herself thrown towards the tip of the universe where she would be helplessly sucked into The Ankoku Makai, It would be their she would live for the next 11 years of her life.
Character Picture: (Link is preferred)
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Post by Axel on May 2, 2021 19:51:40 GMT -5
Hello, welcome to the site! This looks good but there are a couple things to note. 1) Starting Fighting Style: Aggressive (Saiyans Only.) This is only for full blooded saiyans. Hybrids get their own specific benefits, which you need to select. You can find them Here. Go down to Hybrids. You also have to specific which race is your dominant one which will determine which disadvantages you'll receive. 2) You need a Character Bio that's separated from your RP sample if you're going to be a custom (but it only has to be 100 to 300 words.) 3) Your RP sample has to be 300 words long, I counted about 220.
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Post by Xayl on May 2, 2021 21:30:19 GMT -5
Were you referred?: no Discord Name: Xayl Starting Character:Xayl Character Name: Xayl Aliases: Human Name: Tora | Saiyan Name: Xayl | Daemon Name: Xal(Xalmid) Starting Planet: Kanassa Character Race: Saiyan/Demon ( Dominant Race: Saiyan) Race Benefits: 1) Saiyan Transformations 2) Majin Transformations Gender/b]: Female Starting Stat Distribution: Customs = 4500 points - Strength:1000
- Speed:900
- Toughness:800
- Stamina:1000
- Vitality:800
Starting Trait Distribution: Custom (5 points) - Determination:2
- Charisma:2
- Intelligence:1
Starting Technique: Dodonpa (Pick 1 green technique from this page, www.alexsdbzrpg.com/techfundamental.php)Starting Fighting Style: Not Yet Learned (Saiyans Only. Refer to this page, alexsdbzrpg.com/styles.php)Starting Stat Bonus: 00 Character Bio: It was the strike of Frost Demons or more commonly known as The Frieza Race. Xayl, a Saiyan child, was shortly born before the dreaded invasion of the Frieza race on the Saiyan Empire. The empire was only beginning to fall when her parents had desperately sought out to evacuate her off of planet Vegeta, in hopes that she would be able to reestablish Saiyan control on a nearby planet, luckily that planet happened to be Earth. Yet sadly Xayl's pod would never make it to the blue peaceful planet. Her pod all alone in space would pick up on the radar of one of the enemy ships, and being unable to avoid any of their attacks, they would begin firing off beams at her pod. As a result of the oncoming blast, Xayl's pod would become greatly damaged, throwing her off the course of her destination. No one would hear the 3-month-old infant’s tears, as her pod would be sent ricocheting off into deep space. Unable to do anything but cry, she would only continue to do so... yet who knew, that by just doing just that, it would help her, even if it was a little. In time her constant rage and fear would cause her Ki levels to poor out in bowls, offsetting her ship in a more stable direction, yet this direction would set her nowhere near the peaceful planet in which her parents had wished for her to go to... instead, she had found herself thrown towards the tip of the universe where she would be helplessly sucked into The Ankoku Makai, It would be there that she spend the next 11 years of her life. It had been one whole year before any demon critters had stumbled upon Xayl's pod. Upon discovering her, they had found that the child had been greatly malnourished, but due to sheer luck, the pod had been able to sustain her in a sleep-like status, sustaining her small body with only the bare minimum needed to survive. The demons quickly thought of using the child as a slave, but soon noticed a large amount of Ki pouring out from her weak body, and decided to take her in as their own. The demons would raise her and teach her about the ways of the Majin. Naturally, after being raised for 11 years, she would learn the names of the demons who took care of her, Dala and Shiba, her so-called foster parents, and from them, she would also learn to sense and utilize dark energy. In ways, her body would begin to change and adjust. As she continued to use Dark Energy, her body would naturally come to take the appearance of daemon with paler bluer skin, and white hair, but this appearance would only take form when she was under the influence of Dark Energy. Xayl - Daemon Appearance Now in the current day, Xayl is working on rebuilding her pod which had crash-landed in the demon realm, in hopes that one day she will be able to use to discover her true origins. Age: 11(Kid) Height: 4"8" Weight: 79lbs Hair Color: Black -> White Eye Color: Dark Brown -> Red Appearance: Tora is a short girl. She normally has dark skin and her hair color is black... Clothing: Her current clothing is that of the common uniform of the Saiyan race... RP SAMPLE:
*The house had been completely torn apart, rubble lay spread across a wide area, it would seem that Xayl and her group had come by just a little too late. Xayl still felt that there would be some scraps left and would run into the rubble and begin searching.*
Dala: “Xal wait don’t run off on your own, it could be dangerous” Dala would say calling out to her.
*Xayl would seem look back at Dala with a cheeky smile,*
Xayl: “Dont worry I can handle myself.”
*Before proceeding she would manipulate the dark energy around her and use it to move some of the rubble out of the way, which would then lead her to a small whole in the building. Curious she approached it and quickly made her way down.*
Tora: "Dala look, I think I finally found something good." She would say, calling out to the two demons above.
*You could hear Xayl scouring through the rubble, as she pulled out the scraps of whatever she found useful. The two demons watched as she continued to search for anything she could find, food, toys, parts, anything that would help her pass the time.*
Shiba: “Oi Xal(Xalmid), I think it’s about time we move on to the next area, this place was raided just recently, so other factions could still be around looking for scraps, so if we don’t move now, there might be a chance that we would run into them.” she would say calling out to the child.
*Xayl had an inkling that her mom Shiba was right about there being other factions close by, since she could easily sense the amount of dark energy surrounding the area, she knew that they would probably end up running into one of them sooner or later.*
Xayl: "Okay I'll do my best to finish up down here," she responded, calling out from down below.
Xayl - Teen (SPOILER ALERT)
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Post by Galactic King on May 3, 2021 1:17:04 GMT -5
Hi, welcome! Almost there. Demon Realm isn't a location you can start on for this site, it would have to be a planet on the universe page: alexsdbzrpg.com/universe.php . It also looks like you're shorting yourself 100 stat points in your distribution, I only count 4,400. I also do not believe you'd start with a fighting style as Walid mentioned, but you can still earn one normally. Please reply here when edits are made so we can get you setup!
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Post by Xayl on May 3, 2021 15:54:09 GMT -5
All finished with the updates:
1) Starting planet --> Kanassa 2) Stat distribution - FIXED 3) Fighting Style --> Not Yet Learned 4) RP Sample Complete
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Post by Broly on May 4, 2021 13:34:09 GMT -5
Hey there! Reading over your sample, just for future references, the site is written a bit different. It is in the 3rd person past tense and displayed more like paragraphs instead of lines. For example the beginning might change to something like:
The house had been completely torn apart, rubble laid spread across a wide area. Xayl and her group had come by just a little too late it seemed. Still desperate to find some sort of scraps she began scouring for anything. “Xal wait don’t run off on your own, it could be dangerous” Dala said, calling out to her.
With a flash of a cheeky smile Xayl replied, “dont worry I can handle myself.”
You wrote the backstory in the right context, so just stick with that and I'm sure you'll be fine! A member of the staff should be getting back to you soon enough. Enjoy!
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Post by Galactic King on May 7, 2021 1:40:22 GMT -5
Just a reminder to self that this was processed and user is in Column 4.
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